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« on: April 10, 2014, 12:15:40 AM »
I'll just post the titles first(most of them are not translated), and add more contents later.
You can find the titles of cutscenes/dialogues at "Klonoa's home(クロノアの家).
This post may get very, very long, but I think "one thread for at least one area" is the best policy. And I can hide the completed translations with spoiler function.
The other important thing is taking care of the Japanese honorifics. Since equivalent terms are usually hard to be found out, those should not be translated directly. However, we have to be careful with personalities of the characters, relationships between them, and their mood while translating the rest of the script. Remember we are doing a good and faithful "Westernization".

Reference:
Aoi's translation - http://www5d.biglobe.ne.jp/~aoi-k/other/e_w1.html
Info about JP honorifics - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Japanese_honorifics
Locations mentioned:
Cherry pass at the wind village/風の村 サクラとうげ
Outskirts of the village/村のはずれ
Temple of Claire/クレア寺院
Bill Hill/かねの丘
The foot of Bill Hill/かねの丘ふもと
Central street/中央街道
Klonoa's home/クロノアの家
Gunston Quarry/ガンストン石切場
East street of Breezegale/ブリーガル東街道

Opening オープニング
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The bud that never blooms ひらかないつぼみ ヒカリサクラ
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Monsters defeated! カイブツをぶっとばせ!
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A hero, a hero! ヒーロー、ヒーロー!
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Just leave it to me! ボクにまかせて!
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The promise to Lolo ロロとのやくそく
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Confronting the Giant Moo!  たいけつ!ジャイアントムゥ
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A mysterious man ナゾのおとこ
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Get the light blossom back! ヒカリサクラを とりかえせ!
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Give it back! GIVE IT BACK! かえせかえせかえせ!
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きたれわかものサイキョーとっくん!
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オトコならコブシでかたれ
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Klonoa Tornado Attack! クロノア・トルネード・アタック!
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ぼくじょうでまってるぜ
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マグナぼくじょうのけっとう
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Lolo's departure ロロのしゅっぱつ
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サイコーのたびだち
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« Last Edit: June 23, 2014, 07:32:33 AM by RollingMeowcat »
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« Reply #1 on: April 10, 2014, 12:30:41 AM »
it's a rpg and rpgs have lots and lots of dialog. so it does scripting really matters the most.

what exactly is a honorific?

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« Reply #2 on: April 10, 2014, 12:47:39 AM »
Opening

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Breezegale

The Light Blossom, a Bloomless Flower

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Monsters Defeated!

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A Hero!

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Just Leave it to Me!

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A Promise to Lolo

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Confronting the Giant Moo

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A Mysterious Man

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Get the Light Blossom Back!

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Gimme! Gimme! Gimme!

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The Ultimate Training Course! Come One, Come All!

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Real Men Talk With Their Fists!

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Klonoa's Tornado Attack!

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Waiting at the Corral

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Showdown at the Magna Corral

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Lolo's Departure

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The Best Time to Start a Journey

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And with that, Breezegale is complete! :D
« Last Edit: April 10, 2014, 10:26:28 PM by Fake Ring »

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« Reply #3 on: April 10, 2014, 04:35:34 AM »
@Fake Ring You are such a highly-efficient person. : D

Edit: I still think everyone should take a look at the original script - even it seems not too many people know Japanese here. Plz wait for me thanks
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« Reply #4 on: April 10, 2014, 04:45:59 AM »
Quote from: "RollingMeowcat"
@Fake Ring You are such a highly-efficient person. : D
That's the power of dedication at work! ;)

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« Reply #5 on: April 10, 2014, 09:51:24 PM »
Nice work guys.

Is this all from the first chapter?


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« Reply #6 on: April 10, 2014, 10:20:49 PM »
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Nice work guys.

Is this all from the first chapter?
Yup, I went and did my take on Breezegale. Is anyone else going to give it a go? :unsure:

Edit: I'll also do other areas if you'd like me to. However, I don't have access to any villager/resident dialogue, unfortunately. :(
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« Reply #7 on: April 10, 2014, 10:57:22 PM »
Feel free to do that if you please. You might even be able to use Aoi's translations and sort of reword it to whatever you feel.


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« Reply #8 on: April 10, 2014, 11:01:05 PM »
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Feel free to do that if you please. You might even be able to use Aoi's translations and sort of reword it to whatever you feel.
That's actually what I've been doing the entire time. ^^;

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« Reply #9 on: April 10, 2014, 11:54:37 PM »
I agree with darai. Polishing Aoi's rough translations is wayyyyyy easier than translating the original from scratch. But I still want to post the Japanese script here for comparison and make anything as prefect as possible.
"とうげ" or "峠" means "mountain pass", and a pass is locally the highest point on that route. (from wikipedia) Anyone has a idea for "サクラとうげ"?
Another thing - Chipple calls Klonoa "アニキ", literally "big bro". But I'm sure calling someone "アニキ" in Japanese is a bit different from calling the same person "big brother" in English. I guess it means Chipple always follows Klonoa in this game.

Typing Japanese can be slow at the beginning, sorry to keep you guys/girls waiting.
What a polite girl Lolo is. She even add the honorific "さん" to familiar people's name when referring to them, including Klonoa.
« Last Edit: April 12, 2014, 09:28:43 PM by RollingMeowcat »
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