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Offline Mario123311

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I wrote a thing... Again.
« on: November 15, 2016, 12:52:34 PM »
Read if you want, or not... I may or may not add more chapters. I always liked writing Klonoa sad, It always made sense to me.

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Re: I wrote a thing... Again.
« Reply #1 on: November 15, 2016, 10:34:28 PM »
I can't explain how I feel about this, other than that it felt really genuine...if that makes any sense. It's like a good sad.
As short as it was, I enjoyed this a lot. Probably more than I should have.
Thank you for writing this. ;u;


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Re: I wrote a thing... Again.
« Reply #2 on: November 16, 2016, 04:30:55 PM »
Wow, this really got to my heart strings, it's really good. The feels here just felt more genuine than your previous works, not to put them down of course, I'm just trying to say that I can call this your best yet.

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Re: I wrote a thing... Again.
« Reply #3 on: November 18, 2016, 03:19:54 PM »
I can't explain how I feel about this, other than that it felt really genuine...if that makes any sense. It's like a good sad.
As short as it was, I enjoyed this a lot. Probably more than I should have.
Thank you for writing this. ;u;
Heheh~ ^//w//^ Really, thanks. It means a lot, I really tried to be more emotional with this one.

Wow, this really got to my heart strings, it's really good. The feels here just felt more genuine than your previous works, not to put them down of course, I'm just trying to say that I can call this your best yet.
I can understand. :3 Again, continuing from what I said above - I've always been a sucker for KloLo and I guess I always felt their rather sad connections always was something that helped that. After all, when a friend helps another it only makes sense for them to help them back. Besides, Klonoa has been through a lot... I can only imagine where he bottles up all that sadness. That and I wrote this to make myself feel a wee bit better in a way to an extent.

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Re: I wrote a thing... Again.
« Reply #4 on: December 31, 2016, 07:35:00 PM »
Added a new chapter. I'm planning to build up to some sort of cute "confession" between the two.  :drowned: Eheheh~...

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Re: I wrote a thing... Again.
« Reply #5 on: January 19, 2017, 09:54:45 AM »
Added another chapter. Critiques always welcome, I always get kinda flustered writing these.

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Re: I wrote a thing... Again.
« Reply #6 on: January 19, 2017, 07:22:01 PM »
Gotta say that I'm really liking where this story might be headed towards. Specifically in terms of Klonoa's perspective of the whole thing, but I think I'd rather save those thoughts for when you get to the "confession".
« Last Edit: January 20, 2017, 02:49:39 PM by Matiri »

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Re: I wrote a thing... Again.
« Reply #7 on: January 30, 2017, 01:00:54 AM »
New chapter up.... "Confessions". And even then I've still got ideas. I'm pretty shy putting this up let alone just trying to actually make it convincing and not just feel forced.

Been in a pretty good mood and motivated so this one was made sooner.

these two have officially taken over my heart

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« Reply #8 on: January 30, 2017, 09:16:55 AM »
I'm not sure if I may suggest any ideas so I'm writing it under spoilers so that if you don't want it you don't have to read it.

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Re: I wrote a thing... Again.
« Reply #9 on: January 30, 2017, 09:52:52 AM »
You can suggest ideas, I'll probably think about it although I think it's worth noting I'm saving the sadness of them being seperated (pretty much forever) for another story. Which is moreso based on the fact Lolo's VA is gone...